Comments : Stereotypical World. [Song]

  • I loved it, I would also like to hear it as a song. It flowed nicely though, as well as kept my attention all the way through it.. Wonderful job. Keep up the good work. 5/5 =)
    -Ally

  • 17 years ago

    by Amanda

    I absolutly adore this piece of work.
    Keep it up!

    - Mandee

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Excellent. I love this peice, I would love to hear it as a song, but I think you did a really good job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    Haha I really liked this poem! Although I think the word "boy" was slightly overused, the line "this may seem a little stereotypical, but it's a stereotypical world" has so much truth to it. Good job! 5/5

    ~jas~

  • 17 years ago

    by Miu

    Aww like really really good! Would love to hear it as a song yes :) Love these lyrics :)

  • Hmmm...i would really like to here the tune to this song...but I like it alot...i like the idea expressed in it and how it kind've rhymes but not really...it keeps it from sounding corny...good work...
    Jonda Beth

  • 17 years ago

    by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX

    Wonderful lyrics. you definately did a great job on this. the flow and i think the rythem was great.

    And, I don't like
    Your hair in that mess,
    lookin' like you just gotta outta bed.
    Your clothes that tight;
    Boy, it just ain't right.
    No, we're not meant to be.
    The world the can't see you with me.

    this was really good and i liked it most. But for the last line, i think you should take out "the" from in between "world" and "can't".

    besides that the whole song was great. 5/5 keep up the great work.

  • 17 years ago

    by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX

    Wonderful lyrics. you definately did a great job on this. the flow was really good and i think the rythem was great.*

    sorry i made a mistake, my bad.

  • 17 years ago

    by Dave

    Exclent job great flow and i could picture a mid-tempo beat a real top 20's pop feel

  • 17 years ago

    by Julienne

    I really like how your song related the real world, to how you felt that you needed to conform to it and how the relations really came out. i enjoyed reading this piece. thanks you
    could you please comment my poem? any pick would be fine, thanks!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    Wow, I really liked this. I love songs and such about how the world is stereotypical and judgemental.. Excellently written..

    Sole. x

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Cool 5/5