Hmmm I liked how you ended with "But why?", it's dramatic and summarises the whole poem...
But I think the spelling and grammer of the rest of it really let it down. It might just be me, but I'm really pedantic about stuff liek that, it gets on my nerves [xD]

I liked the idea of this poem, the whole fear and fleeing motif, but you wrote it pretty poorly.

Keep writing dude, you got heaps of potential.

xxx Olivia