I don't like the last three lines, they somehow don't fit in whole poem but rest of this piece is excellent. You are really talented, I like the way that you described emotions, very interesting topic too. It seems like you can tell many things with so little words. This poem really deserves 5/5

Wow, not only can I relate to your poem but I really love it. This is the best poem in this section I have read for a long time...