Good poem, its very cleverly written. you should be proud. keep writing xx

This is a very good poem chantelle, flow is a little shaky but it is very good. a few grammer mistakes, like capitalizing the beggining of the sentences and adding periods at the end of the sentences. but overall this is wonderful, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Hey.. i just wanted people to know that i havent actually finished writing this.. and i wasnt ready to post it but i didnt know how to take it down without deleting it !! but thankx for ur comments.. it really good to get some feedback !
catch xx

A bit longer now and i see u fixed some of the mistakes, still a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!