Its pretty good, had great flow. Except on one thing, its not very big:

"doomed to hell"

For some reason I think it should be doomed IN hell, I dont know, just my opinion lol. But anyways it was a great poem!!

Yeah that does sound alot better and its really what I was going for anyway lol I cant believe I didnt think of it I read it through soooo many tiems looking for small stuff like that lol.

Thanks for the input :)

I like this alot! There's so much emotion you put into this. Good job!

Strong poem, you did a great job with it!