This is a wonderful poem David. There was one little thing wrong with it. In "Yet I push through anther day". you spelt 'another' wrong. Othr then that little thing, it was a great read. 5/5

Kalee

Wow, David, I can honestly say that I am at a loss for words. I can say that I know what it is like to want to be free from so much pain, but to put in words as elegantly as you have is truly amazing.

Keep writing and never loss track of your gift. Your talent will carry you far through life in ways that you have yet to experience.

--Sher

Wow, just wow. This was intense, I loved it. The emotion within this poem was outstanding. You are a very talented writter, keep up the amazing work. I enjoyed the read.

Peace, Joe

David
Very dark and deep thoughts. Good job!

Untie the cable round my wings
Set me free and let me fly
Don't hold me down, I need to leave
My true home is in the sky

I really was touched with these lines.
Take care Cindy

Woah. This is a very unique poem. I've never read something like this. The story was original and I like everything about it. It was sad, yet so powerful with the expression of emotion. Your word choice is really well used in this, which helps the description and imagery along very well. The flow was good, as was the rhyming. Excellent write David. =] 5/5

Tammie

Love the opening lines...

Untie the cable round my wings
Set me free and let me fly
Don't hold me down, I need to leave
My true home is in the sky

Well written and thought provoking.....All the best, Debbie

Love the imagery! 5/5

Wow this is really good great great job..............leona

Wow this is reallllly strong, the flow is pretty good too, and the emotion is so there. it is really beautiful, and really is so breathtaking i don't know what to say!!!
5/5
gabriella

I couldnt take my eyes off it once i started reading, very well written, and very enjoyable.

Wow, i love how you've set it out so your readers will actually imagine this happening once again you've done an excellent job. = ) 7/5
crystal ps. you have never commented my work =(

Wow, i love how you've set it out so your readers will actually imagine this happening once again you've done an excellent job. = ) 7/5
crystal ps. you have never commented my work =(

Wow your good i enjoy this poem and couldnt take my eyes off it good job 5/5 X)
----- cynthia m.

Wow, excellent poem, it had a real meaning behind it, and easy to relate to. Good work, 5/5

Very good!

This was extraordinary, i loved it, so much emotion. keep it up

Wow. i really like it.

This is a relaly nice poem i like it it kinda leaves room for the imagination as to what happened.. and yet tells the wole story
Nicley written

I love this poem like all of your poems. You are an wonderful writer. You are a great mentor to me and many others. Thank you!!!!

Very well written. original and i like it. :] keep up the good work!