Comments : Die with Lies

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I love how bitter this poem is. Seriously, it's great! So full of anger - so furious.

    The only thing I'd comment on is - you overuse exclamation marks. I'm not saying they aren't needed, because the persona is very angry and exlamation marks are helping to get the point across. However, overuse of them ruins the effect they have.

    Nice work.