Wow.. i LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem.. its fantastic.. the emotion is so strong and the flow is really nice too.. i love the structure and the choppy lines.. its a nice touch.. a very enjoyable read..

and o yeah wonderful wording, especially here, "Away from me
Falling in you"
** SO FANTASTIC!

Wow breathtaking....indecribable (lol sorry bad spelling)

tara

Awwwwww
love it.. it makes me sad.. boys suck :(
lol but this is one where youre in love.. so for that i give it a 5/5... good job :)
<3 ang

Amazing!! 5/5

Every time I hug her I sort of feel like this too. "why can't we just stay like this?" "this is nice. why don't you come back and do the promises you told me?"
I know how hard it can feel. but writing it down helps. ;) good stuff.