I don't like how you didn't spell out words, but instead used numbers or letters. Also, your grammar wasn't all there. The idea was sweet, but the structure wasn't.

Hmm to whom u dedicated ur poem...? i appreciate how u write atleast u try., though its not really impress me and some are not really properly wirtten well and some i think the structure wasnt good... but although, i think it works more better so just keep on writng all what u feel coz i know sometimes it helps us to prevent or to be feel free the way we express our feeling thru writing.. so ireally appreciate ur work... and dont get me wrong coz i honestly like ur work from the bottom of my heart..