I liek your rhythms and style of rhyme. You said in a comment to me that you had not seen that style of poem. Im sure you havent because I made it up. lol thank you for noticing. I like this poem mainly because it is something I can relate to. Been there. Done that. And I didnt even know what a stanza was until last year so I was a little surprised a 12 year old would get the whole stanza thing down. Thats awesome. lol I congradulate you. And at the end I think you need something better to close it with. Almost another stanza. It doesnt end really, it just stops. Other then that its really good. Keep it up. Thank you for the comment.

God bless

~skittles

Hey honey,
This is a lovely poem, very deep! I can almost hear you pleeing!
If thsi poem is how you really feel then your friend needs to believe you! I believe you!
Hey friend please believe her, look how much she loves you!
Okay - sorry i'm ranting.
Very powerful work! I cant believe that you are 12! You are fantastic! well done honey x

Great work hun!....excellently portrayed emotions and soo deep...n i can relate too...beautiful...and powerful too!...kp writing..
xxPoojaxx

Hey, hows it going? The name is Chan. I really enjoyed this poem because it has this emotion that flanks from your poem, pulls people in...... You can almost hear the pleas .... but darling i hope it sort itself out, i an relate i have had the same problem b4! cheer up, great and well penned poem!

My favourite stanza:
She thinks I'm lying
That it's all true
Thats why I'm crying
I'm losing you

5/5