You are a spectular writer! Awesome job!! Flow is great, and the emotional part of this poem is huge! Awesome job!! 5/5. It's so relateable to as well! I'm stunned!! You have some awesome talent!

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

You are a spectular writer! Awesome job!! Flow is great, and the emotional part of this poem is huge! Awesome job!! 5/5. It's so relateable to as well! I'm stunned!! You have some awesome talent!

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Good job! 5/5 for me! keep up the good work.

-Molly

You have some overused words. The flow sometimes felt choppy and forced. Is it in a sonnet form? It could explain the flow prob and the word choice.
"You walk past and you do not look at me
I am trying to remember the past"
These lines feel...wooden, I guess. It needs something more to it... Of course the little story-ish thing this piece has is actually cool.
~Faith-less

^ just to add, thanks for the critique, but yes this is a sonnet, which was written for my english class haha

Hey.beautiful peice..loved it!....kp writing..
Tk care.
xx Pooja xx

I know exactly how you feel with this poem. it was a great poem with great flow. you are an amazing writer and keep the good work up. thanks for the comment.
chels.