Very nicely written!
You have wonderful talent!
I really like the imagery.
My favorite part was...

Slowly twirling around as a sweet kiss.
Softly touching only the tips as
blotted pink wax upon a glassy surface.

^^ I loved this stanza
to me it was very original so nice job!!

This poem didn't really make sense to me.
Maybe you should work on that.
Or maybe you can explain so I can give you a better comment. :]

Um yah I didn't quit get what you were trying to get a cross other then being about memories being missed. I really don't know what you could do to make it easier to understand. It still had a great flow to it though:) I gave it a 5 out of 5.

Wow... this poem is wonderful... definitly the best i have read so far .. you do good with a given structure

the flow is wonderful

i also think it clever how you say "blotted pink wax upon a glassy surface. " repeatedly and finally in the end explain it as the lava lamp. its beautiful how you took such a simple object and made a poem that was filled with emotion and such longing for memories. wonerful job .. really :D

I'm not sure the format of this kind of poem, but I'm, sure you did an excellent job in following the structure. This was a really good poem, there wasn't any one line or verse I really liked. It was a good poem though.