Wow i love this poem... the first two lines are like beyong amazing... you describe everything really well so its like you see it as you read it.. which is good.. the ending is okay not as strong as i thought it could be but its still really good :D my favorite so far

Seemed forced rhymed in a couple of places. The poem was sad, and unbareable. I really hope you don't have to go through this. It's quite sad. WEll great write! God Bless 5/5
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The rhyme didn't flow too well in a couple of places, but the way you descibed things was as if you were reliving through this experience over again. Very sad. 5/5

Hey,
Thanks for your comment. And yes honesty is something i want. In all of my poems. Lol. Anyways i have to say, i liked how you portrayed a victem of demestic violance, funny things can happen becuase of the affects of alcohol. :( I hope this isnt acctually true and its not acctually happening to you. Ok the structure was ok, but wasnt that great. I liked the first stanza repitition; "I sit and watch him .... all his pain away", i just think this helped catch the readers attention and it owrked brilliantly. It extended the point your making. The rest of the poem makes the reader quite horrified that this could happen. The sad thing is it could happen to anyone, and it is popular. To improve i suggest you use punctuation in your work, i htink that could imporve it. Otehr then that a good read. xx

Wow this poem is awesome. I liked it the emtion is strong, and it is well written. Keeep writting and I will keep reading. 4/5

Wow! That was an amazing write. Very very sad and emotional. Really made me wonder how many people go through this. I hope your not one of them. Well done on this poem. It was very very good. Xx Chrissie

Hey beautiful poem!..filled with emotions!...great write!..Kp up de good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

"funny things can happen becuase of the affects of alcohol."

Hey,
I was re - reading my previous comment, and i realised what i had written. I didnt mean that its funny or anything, what i meant was; that alcohol has so many bad, damaging affects. Not funny as in haha, but funny becuase how can this drug acctually be legal? How can it be so wide spread? Thats what i meant.
So i apologise if this part of my comment offended anyone, including the reader.
I just meant that the effects of alcohol are so damaging and awful.
So sorry to anyone i offended including the writer of the poem. It was an excellent read.
xx