I love your poetry. It always inspires me to write more, but I can't write because I'm supposed to be doing my Chemistry and I took a break, haha. But, I loved this. I was going to take this title for that contest, but I didn't, obviously. And you did a way better job with it than I ever could have lol. Keep it up Darling.

"How far away own thoughts are from home."

^^ In that line, would it make more sense to make it.. "How far away OUR own thoughts are from home."

Without the capitals, of course. Lol. Anyways, great write.

5.5

"Dragonflies will sing, astronauts will see,
How far away own thoughts are from home.
Catch that mind from losing so much control,
Punish it for leaving you all alone."

I adored those lines, I love reading poems like this, they really get you thinking. I loved how you managed to make it flow so well, and great word choice too :) 5/5 great work.

Man, the triolet scheme seems so punctual, but it flowed well. same a cherise i must say i loved the line about dragonflies and astronaughts. a great write. and always looking for more. (:

Wow this poem was very well done. I think that the last stanza was definatly my favorite because when I started reading it I wasn't to sure how the title was going to make sence but now that I'm done I can see now. You used so many metaphores in your poetry and while they are all very unique they all have meaning and make sence with the poem that they are placed in. "Catch that mind from losing so much control," I think that this was such a beautifuly penned line and I loved the meaning. Well done. 5/5