This is an excellent poem ciao, and congrats on getting 200, love the flow, i give it a 5/5 as always!!!

:] Congratz on the 200 sweetie!

This poem was fabulous. Lots of emotions and vivid detail. Deeply sad though... :[

Only one problem I found:

"Standing under the streetl amp, with ashen light cast around,"
^Should be "street lamp".
Fix that & the poem will be perfect.
Fantastic job, keep writing!
5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Ohhh this was so beautifully written.
The flow was flawless, imagery used beautifully done, it creates very vivid pictures, and that ending is so intense, sad and hardhitting.
I love it!

Haha i liked it. congrants on 200 haha .. dangit i wasnt first!?!?! tehe well this was a well writen poem. good work

Great ending to the poem. Really hit home. the first two lines really draw you in too! That's great!
Charisma*