The beginning was fine
But the middle got kind of sloppy
You always choose the big, great topics
Now you just have to find
The greats words to show it.
Your poem, in the middle, kind of seemed cliched.
But that is, of course, because you used
One of my pet peeves, "angst"
Eck.
Hate that word.
Lol.
All in all, I give you a four.
Just because, I know you can do better :]