This was... different. I liked it, but I'm sure I would have preferred it much more if you had used an actual structure. It just sort of seemed all over the place.

You had an awful lot of mistakes, too. First of all, don't overuse exclamation marks (!!!). It doesn't look poetic. Also, you seemed to capitalise in the most random places, too. Don't do that, there's no need.

"Why is my rainbow raining?" - I loved that line.

Wow, this is an amazing poem... your style is so surprising...... the only thing wrong was your spelling, you misspelled lots of the words and it kinda sets the reader off a bit..
but great job.
i wish i could get my feelings out like that.
4/5
gabriella