Being extraordinarily picky. I like punctuation, that may just be personal preference.

I'm letting go of everything,
I though I'd hold onto. --Removed the "that." Does it flow better?
I'm risking this fragile thing,
All because of you.

I'm carrying this fear,
I thought I'd never admit. --Removed the "that."
I try to find the words, --switched it up a bit...
But they just don't seem to fit.

I'm fighting for a feeling,
I though I couldn't feel.
I'm giving you my heart,
This has never felt so real.

I'm seeing something new, --it feels so beautifully simple, the word experiencing seems to ruin the childlike feeling it has.
That I thought I wouldn't see.
I'm out of my comfort zone,
I thought you fought for me. --This line didn't jibe with me. I don't like it this way either though...

I'm hoping on these dreams,
I thought I'd never understand. --shortened a bit, for flow.
I'm wishing with my everything,
You'll choose to take my hand.

These were amazing, --What are "these"?
And I'm doing all that I can. --removed the "do"
To have you standing by my side,
Cause I'm falling hard for you. --"Cause" works better with the rhythm, but it isn't as nice a word.

I like the feeling in this piece, taking risks is something I don't do enough of.

Awww i love this poem. its very nice and heart warming 5/5