Great poem. At first glance I thought the flow might have been a little off but after reading it the flow was just fine. I really liked this poem. 5/5

Very good
The poem was excellent
The flow was pretty good
Nice idea
Wonderful

Well written excelent word choice, the emtions were dark, and deep, and the message was clear. YOu did a great job and deserve nothing less than 5/5

I though it was great,the word choice was superb and i could feel all the emotions running through it, 5/5

Wow there was something about this poem that reached out to me. I loved all the descriptions, they didnt seem to go over the top yet there was just enough to give your poem grace and structure. I loved how you decided against a rhyme scheme also, it made each line stand out more and made the reader think about what it was saying. Amazing metaphores.. this is one of my favorite poems.. and if you don't mind then I'm going to add it to my book of poetry (I will give you credit for it) thanx for recomending this one.

This is amazing!!! As i was reading it, i visualized every word you said. Keep up the good work!!!