This poem was a tad confusing in the first stanza
But it got a bit better as it went on
I liked the repeating parts
nice job
5/5

It is a bit confusing, but yes i really liked your rythm and the words you have chosen.
i also really like your idea and how you were able to put this feeling into words *claps*
all in all it was wonderful
5/5
gabriella

I loved this poem....great work..yeah it was kinda confusing..the peice is penned well...Good work!...and your choice of words and the emotions filled in ur work is adding to the beauty of the poem.Kp up the good work!
5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Great job. The emotions were felt all the way through and in the end all made sense. It flowed very well also. Well done
cheers, josh

I understand it...it is very good. i really like it.

xo kisses xo

Its very well put, your ryhimg was good to, i loved it

I realy like this im not sure how to explain why but i do.

Love the poem great job...5/5.......your are a really good writter......oh and if you will can you please rate and comment on my poems thankz.....

Not confusing to me at all... Its very well writin great job...

This is good. it is not my favorite of yours but it is still powerful in wording. great job. keep it up.5/5

I dont find this poem confusing... I acctually found it quite the oppisite. From my own experiances i guess i got a meaning out from it. i can kinda relate to your words, though probably in a completely different way then yourself. Anyways i loved this whole style youve got going hear. Kinda like repition but different. Quite a unique read. I liked the rhyme scheme you have going hear. This style you have going hear alonge with the rhyme gives it a brilliant flow. A good read. To improve this i suggest you use punctuation as htis will help the reader, read the poem as you wish it to be read. Keep it up! xx

Just like Perfectly Imperfect, I too did not find it confusing ... and I found the words had a strong impact. Nice write.

Umm... what are people going on about with this poem? How can this be confusing? WTF? Its perfectly interesting and understandable at the same time - different yet still speaks the same language as me. Liked it a lot. Not that you needed my approval (Im sure)... :)

Ciao

Mo

Oh wow.... this speaks volume, wait it screams volume at me. I can relate to this so much and it is as though you are walking in my shoes or hiding in the shadows watching and feeling my every move.

My favorite stanza was the part about waiting to have feelings; not wanting to be numb.

That one stanza just grabbed me and would not let me go.

Very good indeed dear...

Just absolute bliss

--Sher

Lovely, I like this piece. It has a great
flow to it. I give this a 5/5!!

I did not find it confusing at all, i thought you did an amazing job on it, and the way you put it into words was just great, i think if everyone was in a position to write this, they would all write it the same of not wanting to die, awesome job. 5/5

Goodjob,very powerful
keep it up!

Great work. well written. all together awesome.. keep it up 5/5

I like that you stick to a steady rhythm and rhyme. Your lines all starting the same way in the same pattern is very effective and helps the reader keep with the poem. Nice job!
*ME*

Yea, it was confusing at first, but i got it at the end! another one of your great poems! keep it up!