Hassan
A very deep and intense write. I can feel your pain and sadness. Good job!
Take Care Your Friend Cindy

Short but very deep words.....
Good write!!!

God bless u

Very well done... its easy to understand so simple but still very powerfull. keep up the good work

In all truth, my attention was immediately hooked up upon reading this piece. But yet, I sense that this piece should be expanded. It seems to be a mere portion of an even greater poem.

Nevertheless, one of its highlights is its vivid imagery. I liked the way you portrayed it and delivered it well. :)

Thanks for sharing!

-Marian

I liked this...the depth and emotion are clearly there, I thought it could have been a little longer, but apart from that you did a wonderful job.

Hmm. A touching piece. Moving in many ways. Great work!
Greta
xo