Wow amazing poem!!! so how did you do in the contest? i hope ya did well! you totally desver it!, your poem was fabulous!

-----lots of love and luck, tara

That was really well written. you conveyed emotions with depth and detail. good job. 5/5

Omg. i love it. how did it do in the contest??? its really a great poem.. i cant think of ANY flaws. :D :D
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Wow.. this poem is truly specacular.. i hope you win the contest... you definityly deserve it... the poem is so strong.. "Don't ever runaway, from those who are weak,
Stand up and smile for the words that you speak." i LOVE those lines.. they are so beautiful .. my only suggestion in maybe shortening this line a little to fit the flow better "Her body's spirit however is nothing but fragile."

Wow that was great!!man i loved it!!!5/5
-freakshow
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This was a great poem and I love how you expressed the girl in the poems. Her feelings came alive as I read. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

This was really good.
I especially liked the way you started the poem, talking about a young girl and her life and end up with an important message to everyone in the world.
This was an inspiring poem, the message came across beautifully.
I loved it
love Tara-Kay

Very well written poem...the emotons are conveyed so so clearly n perfectly thru this one...the message was beautiful n the u penned it in an effective manner...this poem is wonderful...kp it up!
5/5=)
xxPoojaxx

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Cool poem. I really liked it. The formt was good, the word choice great, and the flow was nice. I gave it a 5/5.

Amayzing poem! keep writing, i really like your stuff.
:)

"Ugly, stupid, afraid of face,
Terrified; her life is the race."

an EXECELLENT opening..i love how you use the metaphor of life being a race, because its how a lot of us can feel..great work on this, keep up the good work!

A very positive message and great on the flow. 5/5

Rhyming seems very forced, message is excellent but personally I don't like the way that you wrote this one. You could use some metaphors to express emotions on a better way, it is a meaningful poem but it doesn't really have powerful atmosphere like your others. Anyway that is just my opinion.

"Why don't you see, your extremely amazing,
We all are beautiful is the point that I'm raising."

^^Oh how I love those lines. I found them to be incredibly powerful...as was the whole poem. But, those lines just stood out to me for some reason.

"Don't ever runaway, from those who are weak,
Stand up and smile for the words that you speak."

^^ Now that is a PERFECT ending..really. Wow. I don't even know what to say. And that doesn't happen to me very often.

I honestly can not find anything wrong with this. I find it to be beautiful and elegant, and you certainly have a way of bringing things to light that most people would rather not talk about.

Awesome work on this.

Another really good poem the description and your vocabulary was done quite well in this thanks for sharing Plot121

Wow I really enjoyed the way that this poem was written. I think that you did a very good job this isn't the typical poem that I'm used to reading. A heartfelt poem about such topics is hard to write but you did a very good job. I wish that everyone could view these things like you do, like a disease that needs to be healed instead of something that should be covered up and ignored. The message and the flow of the poem were perfect but there were just a few spelling mistakes that I'd like to point out to you. I think that the first line should be "afraid to face" instead of "afraid of face" I think that to makes more sense. "Shes" should be "She's" "cant" should be "can't". I liked the message but I think that it got lost a little bit along the way. The sixth and the seventh stanzas need just a bit of work because the rhymes sound really forced or non existent and it takes a lot away from the potential beauty that the poem holds. A little fixing on those two and I think this poem will be great.