"Her dark hair covered her shamed face as she cried liquid fire."

What an amazing opening! "Cried liquid fire", I bloody love that line!! lol
I loved the whole aspect of this as well, i find it so hard to do free verse like this and you've pulled it off perfectly
Outstanding sweets!
5/5
*Gem*

Unusual but full of vivid descriptions and that's why i liked it. The ending kind of lost me though...like i'm not sure what you meant. Maybe I'll have to reread it a few times...or you can email and tell me!
lol
Charisma*

Wow that was really intense....i definitly felt something....good job!

<3
Sarah