Some of the words were off abit your use of tenses were off and the meaning was not really clear you were more explaining a perposal but not geting and exsample to why he would ever be faithful. Good try Plot121

On the whole, a good piece with a fair sense of rhyme. The words you choose fit well with most of the structure. Ok, there are just minor things I would say you could improve on:
"He squeezes her hand" - you could try and change that to:
"Caressing his hand, their love they cannot hide". The change of word actually supports this soothing, gentle idea you've presented in the first line of the poem, therefore keeping it consistent would make it more effective.

"He hopes she says yes without any doubt" - how about:
"He longs for an answer, a 'yes' without a doubt". The 'any' bit is not necessary.

"He puts the ring on her finger "Will you marry me please?" - I’m not sure about this one, but how about:
"I love you Sarah, will you marry me please?" - The fact that you explain he puts a ring on his finger becomes too much, let the imagery in your poem explain this to the reader :). Therefore, moving into speech may help bring the message across more effectively.

Well, that's all I can see that COULD do with changing- like I said before, it is totally up to you :). However, this is a doubtlessly good poem. Well done :).

Awhh this was sweet. i love poems that tell a story. i also loved the rhyming pattern that this poem had. you did a wonderful job 5/5

Awww...It's such a sweet poem, beautifully written, amazing story, I think it is amazing :D keep up the GREAT work :D

Well, you tricked me, with the name. oh, how i thought it'd be about he/her breaking the others heart. i loved it though! it was so awesome!!

To be here now, it just feel right
He will always lover her and never be unfaithful

Sorry about the above. My computer's a bit screwy :)

Anyway, i really like this poem. It has that happy ending that I am So looking for in my life!

Note: "He will always lover her and never be unfaithful"
"To be here now, it just feel right"

In the first line, shouldn't it be "love" instead of "lover".
In the second line, "feel" should be "feels"

Fantastic write!!! 5/5

Josie