Comments : Savior

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    How can this not have comments yet, it was so beautiful and so heartfelt.

    "I need your heart to be my sanctuary
    And your love to be my playground
    I need you to totally complete me
    And my loss to be what you found"

    I loved that stanza sweets, it was just... beautiful. The word that keeps springing to mind.
    The excellent rhyme scheme and flow just perfects an already fabulous piece
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    WOW! Amazing poem Midnight ! AMAZING!!! SUPERB!!!! 5/5 for sure.

    I want my tears to warrant your kiss
    And that kiss to stop my cries
    And your love to be my playground

    Those lines were my fav!!! Truly amazing!
    Charisma*

  • 16 years ago

    by oldthings

    Aw, thats so sweet.
    I esspecialy liked the switching from complete opposites in the "I need your heart to be my sanctuary and your love to be my playground" i really like that line a lot
    that was beautiful. really truly beautiful. great write

  • 16 years ago

    by SilentRebuke

    Amazing!!!! I agree with charisma and gem- beautiful, suberb. I loved the opening lines:
    I want to fall asleep in your arms
    And wake up in your eyes
    ....
    The switch there is just great, and the phrase" wake up in your eyes" holds so much meaning. I can feel the longing in your words.
    another favorite line is
    please be there when i call your name.

    you have mirrored so exactly what i have felt many times. what we have all felt. truly an outstanding job.