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Aww thats very cute =] i like itt

I think its perfect and says what you want it to :) 5/5

In all honesty, I think you have done better.
However, this is still pretty good.
I adore that ending, it is so beautifully written.
I did think in places the flow wasn't right, but for the most part it was.