It was really chilling and cool..and i would like to help you to make it perfect

And the trees grew coats:If you take the 'and' out here,it would be really good

Other than that,
Really liked it
Keep it up espi
Take care
Laura

Oo, I liked this. I like how the final stanza had some repetition in it to a previous stanza. The emotion was somewhat bitter, and I liked how clearly that was conveyed, yet not in a straight-to-the-point kind of way.

Wow, I loved the language that you used in this poem. Your descriptions were awesome and you protrayed your emotions on a mature level; not skipping around from place to place with every new stanza. The content of this poem was amazing as well and I am sure that a lot of young girls and boys can relate to this.

The flow was a little off on some parts but it wasn't a problem too serious that it nagged at my head while I read through the rest, I was able to stay focussed on what you were writing.

I loved the figurative language that you used in this poem as well with the phrases "..../but not as hard as you dropped me" I LOVED those lines, they really stuck out.

Anyways, this is getting longer than I meant for it to be, haha. Good job Darling. I really enjoyed reading this one. =]

5.5
<3

I really liked this poem. The only thing I could say is that the structure was different in nearly every stanza and wasn't sure if you were repeating the title at the end of each stanza or just on some of them... BUT it read well and if you dont change it, it will still read well!! Its a great little piece of memory on paper - so sometimes its nice not to have organised structure with those poems.

:) Take care

Mo

xx