Wow this is an awesome poem, i love the flow, it's a bit short but over-all really good. i'd love it if you checked mine out and rated/commented on them. thanks alot!!

Ooh i like this one too.. i like the repetition used.. i do that a lot in my poems too.. some people can't do it right but you did.. i really enjoyed it.. nice job =]

This shows lots of emotion toward that person witch is really good i like it lot good repetion and flow...5/5