Gorgeous, the stanza's were well thought out and it was so refreshing to read!

"For with each rock falling down
Like a chisel, it'll find a way through
And when you reach the breaking
I'll be there to keep carrying you"

Just on that stanza, breaking doesn't rhyme with down and the rest of the poem follows the same rhyme scheme. May i suggest a different word instead of breaking? Maybe 'ground'? I dunno, lol

Anyway as for the poem again, the flow never faltered once and after reading it aloud, it was so easy to imagine the situations and to almost see the crumbling heart..
Well done m'dear. An excellent write
*Gem*

Bury me deep inside your heart
Within the abyss of your love
So when this world falls apart
I'm who you'll be thinking of.
^^^^
This stanza just reaches in and grips the heart. Gives me a lump in my throat ... you know the kind you get before you cry ...

The title matches the emotion and poem perfectly!
Well done
Luanne

Hmm. I like the WAY you wrote it and your word usage. But then again it almost sounds like she wants that day to come when he gets his heart broken by the other girl just so that he'll come running back to her. And if you are writing this as though this girl is in love then she should be happy for him if he's truly found that person he wants to be with, and she should want him to be happy. But really if I'm focusing on the poetry FORM and vocabulary choice, it was definately a 5/5! :)
~Midnight Sun

Aww that's sweet but sad. Can't get him off your mind so I'll just put me in his heart lol. Great job. 5/5
-vino

Aw... so sad. i have a few poems like this. I am glad you picked this poem for me to read, it was really good.

5/5 thanks for entering my contest!
Allanah