Good work hun!
the thoughts hv been conveyed well...though but maybe u could change it into a better structure..it'd look attractive..=)just a thought..anyways this peice holds depth n beauty..kp writing!
5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Once more, I would really prefer the poem to be more broken up into stanzas or something. But aside from that minor factor, well written again! You really have a way with words~

I liked this
poem a lot
more. it was
really well
written and it
made a lot of
sence to me.
One suggestion
change forget to
remember. I
think it will make
it a lot stronger,
at least in my
opinion. however,
if you feel as if it
ruins it you don't
have to change
your poem. thanx
for the read.
8-]

Intense,short,chilling and powerfull,awesome job.

Excellent :)
Keep It Up.

This is really good.
i really enjoed reading it..
its very cute =)

Hey this is very touching... very beautiful write...

"Now i lay here as still as death
on a hot summer day,
simply waiting for a storm to come in
and blow me away "

^^ i loved this stanza....very emotional..

Once again really great job

Very good! keep it up :)