Comments : Take me

  • 16 years ago

    by Lindsay

    You have one minor spelling error you need to fix: "don't thinkn of you at all"
    Aside from that, your rhyme scheme is rather inconsistant, so I couldn't really catch the flow. The meaning of the poem has the potential to be quite deep, but I don't feel that your message is clear. I think this is a great poem for girls in relationships to read, I'm very sure they'll be able to relate to it!