This was good, the beginning was great, but it was better than the end, leaving the reader sort of dissapointed after the begining showed how well you can write. 5/5 though.
--musiclives23

Now, this was a great poem! I liked the way you switched up the rhyme scheme and at some points, there were lines that had no rhymes... It was a great poem! Thanks again for entering! You are a good writer! :]

The rhyming threw me off a bit. but. this still was amazing. ''the clock is blinking eights, and it's been 9:03 for hours'' was beautifully written. lovely job. :]