The poem is really good but you could use more punctuation (it's just a constructive critic). I loved it, anyway. 5/5

Very awesome i love the how you grip the words to form a certain tone to each line, its as if a dark story is taking place in black and white but with vivd emotions. wow isnt a big enough word to describe how teasing or taunting it becomes once you start to read it. good job best buddy!

I read this one with full concentration and its just one of the best free verse I have read. Awsome...u deserve only 5/5

With love
Fsams

Aah its awesome. i loved you writing styel you have great talent. take care

Wow was this ever heartfelt :) i really enjoyed this work of art thank you for writing it :)) 5/5

This is really great... so touching and deep. the emotion is portrayed so well here. your word choice is also very good. great job! =]