Comments : The Essence of Spring

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    "One can hope for a single thing,
    That�s for spring to ring and sing its melody." - Such a charming line.

    Reading this nature poem enchants me. It was simply delightful to read! Additional props for the excellent use of poetical devices, intentionally or unintentionally done, such as the internal rhymes in the aforementioned lines, similes, alliteration and etc. What's more interesting to note is that the sensations of hope, joy, and fascination keyed in to the "essence of spring" are perfectly apparent throughout. It is the emotions which I invariably take notice because methinks that they are heartfelt and sincere...

    Wonderful poem, as always, m'dear! Keep on writing, hun! Love, Debbie

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Yuna this is a good piece n with a nice natures story. The poem rhymes well n the flow is worth complimenting. Keep up the good spirit.
    With love
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Raging Rikku

    Very good poem ... it was as if i could see what you saw though your minds eye

    ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by Hatori

    I really liked the beginning of this poem... The first line drew me in to read this very excellent piece of writing :D. The words you used were very well picked, but one thing I would change:

    Are just the beginning is this very sort.

    In this line, you should change the wording, because it doesn't really make sense...

    Other than that, I wouldn't change anything, keep it up, 5/5

    Hatori

    P.S. Thanks for the comments!

  • 16 years ago

    by Hebe

    A beautiful piece of writing.
    A very good discription.
    I loved reading this.
    Take care