Comments : The Game That Played Us

  • 16 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Wow, you are an amazing writer. I don't know why I haven't read your work yet. This one was great. A lot of us can relate to this poem; I know I can. The flow was great and the rhyming was awesome. Another great job. :]

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I loved this poem, you did another really good job. Your imagery and everything is spot on. One thing though,

    "The game that played us is called love, made us weak."
    ^^ I don't know why, but this line sort of threw me off. And then in the last stanza, you are missing some words in it as well.

    Other than that, there's nothing wrong with this poem..great job, Dear.

    5.5
    :]
    <3