Comments : Him

  • 16 years ago

    by Darlena

    EXTREMLY DEEP P0EM. i JUS` HAVE 1 LiL` CRiTiQUE.
    i THiNK THERE SH0ULD HAD BEEN M0RE T0 THE LAST LiNE 0F THE SEC0ND STANZA CUHZ iT S0RTA LEAVES THE READER HANGiN` A LiL` BiT. BUT S0 FAR U HAVE GREAT iDEAS. JUS` EXPAND THEM A LiL` :)

  • 16 years ago

    by One word can do so much

    HI, I think that your poem is great keep writing