Dang. That sucks. It's a great poem but the situation sucks. I'm sorry. 5/5
-vino

I analyzed this piece and the only advice I can give to make it better would be to be careful of the point of view cause you speak from one point of view and jump to another. In poetry it does not really matter but I always like to try to keep one point of view the piece sound nice =P I enjoyed it overall I will continue to read your pieces, if I spot them. Be sure to criticize my work so I can perfect my writting as well =)