I liked it. The word choice was great and the flow worked well. I gave it a 5/5.

Wow this is so beautifully written. I am impressed. wow 5/5 doubtless

First of all i noticed you used an alliteration as your title. This instantly drew me into your peom as you already used a poetic tecqunique. The poem itself was good and had a good flow. I liked this entire idea the poem displayed. You kinda used repition in it, parts of the poem reminded me of a rafrain. The structure of the poem was really good and it was an enjoyable read. The form was brilliant. Your vocabuilary was good and worked. Overall a very enjoyable read. Keep writing! xx

Debbie, beautiful words, beautiful imagery.
you are so talented my friend
keep writing
xxxxxxx

I loved the way you write, the vocab is wonderful
Phil

Very well written! =]]
5/5
.x

Wow...how the hell did i missed this one?? This is not what i am used to of reading from you. Its really ultimate, great pattern and lovely selection of words.
Am glad atleast i read it.. :o)

keep writing dear
all the best and take care

This is very cleverly written you have a very bright future ahead of you with writings like this, well done. Bek

Wow.
This was a beautiful piece.
Great Job.
I love you word choice, by that I mean your vocabulary.
5/5
(Amber)

Wow, another wonderful peice. You deffinatly my new favorite poem writer. This poem had a beautiful meaning. Keep up teh wonderful work! God Bless 5/5
<3Tay

In a bell-clear morning...
[[I love the discription in this line.]]

A desire distilled... in time...
[[And here I just loved the line in general.]]

This is very well written. I mean, I wish I could write this well. Seriously. Now. I wouldn't have spaced it as you have; it really, to me, takes away from the poem.

However, this was very deep and beautiful. Never change the way you write.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5
P.s. [[You should enter my contests; you'd win in a heartbeat, shhh.]] ;]]

Why, thank you, darling. =] I'll edit the structure now.

I loved it, but it completely made sense. the way you made the words come alive, was totally awesome. 5/5

I love this! It's absolutely flawless. Very beautiful little poem. I'm always ready to be amazed when I go to read something you've written. And I always am lol. It was peaceful, the words just seem to run together, like they were meant to be written this way. 5/5!

marcella

I love your word choice. Your are such a great writer. The words you choose are strong yet they flow nicely together making a wonderful piece.
5/5
*Brittney

Hey, this was so good Marian.
I'm usually bad at writing things for contests but you seem pretty good at it girl :)

Marjan x