Oo wow.. i loved everything about this poem...especially the ending.. it really is very powerful..

You are left breathless and alone,
And everyone's forgotten your name.

I love those 2 lines too and I love how you added in the quotes.. wow amazing poem.. veryy nicely written.. keep it up =]

Hi Sheena,
I liked the rhymescheme you used in this poem,
4 lines
A
B
C
A

it was pretty cool to see that, because usually I see a traditional AB AB rhyme scheme. I have yet to see if you always do what you have done in this poem, so congrats to you, you inspired me to read another poem.

Also, I'm going to stop ranting to let you know I think this poem is wonderful.

It's kind of short but it seems these days all the good ones are.

The only problem I had, is that there was a lot of speech, and that is just because I am not used to it.

Also, I don't understand this one line:

"Maybe I [want] to be alone!"

What is the use of the parenthesis?

'You must be careful to spread your ashes,
Because you've already dug your own grave.
Your anger will always strike out and hurt you more;
There's no need to be brave. '
^Amazingggggg stanza.

This had such true meaning to it, and was worded perfectly.
One of your best, [ according to me & that I've read] .
Keep it up, hun. :]

Why this only had two votes prior to mine is FAR beyond me. This is true poetry right here lol, [haven't I already said that to you today? Haha.]

"But the good times are getting old."
^^ This line alone really stuck out to me, it holds so much power in it.

"You must be careful to spread your ashes,
Because you've already dug your own grave.
Your anger will always strike out and hurt you more;
There's no need to be brave. "

^^ Can I say WOW?! The ending is amazing, so much power, so much emotion, so much depth...wow; I loved this.

5.5
:]
<3