I like that you wrote in a styled poem this time. =] You did well, although I think I would class this more as a Senryu, which is a haiku based on emotion rather than nature, as it is. I like the feel of the poem, and the vocab you used was effective. Well done. 5/5 as always.

Tammie

David
Great job on this piece. Wonderful discriptions.
Take care Cindy

Very good poem David!!
It made me visualize nature and the surroundings and I just loved it!
Your so talented and I don't even know how you an be this good!!
I really liked the second part
it was my favorite
wonderful job
keep it up
your amazing
you rock my world
love always
kaila

This is a great poem David. I greatly enjoyed reading it. 5/5

Kalee

Truth hurts the unknown.
that in itself is really beautiful, i think i would've liked the poem just for it's title, but i didn't hav to, the poem flowed so smoothly and sweetly, perfectly.
5/5
gabriella

Triple the haiku! Triple the meaning! 5/5

The line, "Truth hurts the unknown.", intrigued me. I, as a seeker of Truth, am completely appalled by that one statement. It's just that... if the Truth lies in the Unknown, how could it possibly then inflict pain? The depth of that line is beyond my limited comprehension, I suppose. =]

In any case, I really enjoyed reading this type of formed poetry. It's a refreshing read. Thanks for sharing!

-Marian

This is a pretty poem 5/5 short n simple i like it

I read your poem and found it quite an easy read and a pleasant piece. Keep up the good words. May the ebb and flow of your thoughts and emotions find a good spot to call home.

I love the way in which these words fall off your tongue, its so relaxing and peaceful. i love the imagery of nature, was a really nice read

Superb no flow problems and its outstanding. I will try a Haiku soon. You have inspired me. Thank you 5/5

Wow i loved this
its great that your trying new styles :) lol im not that brave
it was perfectly painted picture

kiara

p.s my poem wasnt so much about god it was about a person waiting for the person they loved to either live or die but it was to do with faith aswell :) i couldnt decide where to put it lol

I love those type of poems. That one was pretty deep. And I enjoyed it. You write about various things and I love it.

See....you are so talented!
I never want to see you doubting yourself again, not ever!!
This is so f**king beautiful...
Please never stop writing, I adore your poems.

*hugs*
Ingrid