Comments : Not Having You

  • 16 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    I like this poem alot. I think you did a really good job. maybe you could put it into stanaz though. 5/5

    ~Chelsea~

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Okay.
    First word that popped in my head.
    Overwhelming.

    Add some spaces in there.
    Example:

    There he goes, walking away.
    Let's stop and rewind to that very first day.
    I swear i lost my balance
    when i turned around and saw your face.
    As much as i tried
    i couldn't find it in me to look the other way. Your voice so sweet, singing in my ears.
    The harmonies right on key,
    humming each note perfectly.
    Who knew I'd meet someone like you.
    Who knew I'd fall for a guy that was as great too.
    Exactly what i like, and much much more. You've reached those standards, and even higher.
    I can't say this is love.
    For I've never spoken of it to you.
    When we exchange words
    i get so nervous i feel like falling to the floor.
    It's pretty dumb, and hard to explain.
    But I've fallen so hard, I'm stuck this way.
    With each glance and each look I'm leered in to this trap.

    Something like that.
    Eck.
    It's still confusing :P

  • 16 years ago

    by This Starlight

    That is really good. After i read it i said (wow)
    Good job