Different poem, but i like it. Great job. 5/5

~Chelsea~

Honestly?
There was too much contradicting.
It felt like... lies?
Lol.
I know, weird.
But when I usually think of that word,
Lies are the first thing comes up in my mind.
All in all, it was REALLY confusing.
I tried to get it at first, but blah.
I ended up tuning it out.
All in all dearest,
From what I understood.
It was pretty good.
Although it WAS a bit confusing.
I still give it a 4/5 :]

It was a little confusing, but the metaphors were brillant. The poem would be a little easier for the reader to read and understand, if you seprate it in to stazas. Other tahn that the simple word choice was quite effective, and the emtion was strong, and clear. 5/5

I agree about the confusing part, but some parts of this were brilliant:

"running down your past
racing through the future
baby its no use when you hide in your torture"
^ I really liked that stanza. It gives off the impression of somebody being so confused about their past, and the future, that they just don't know what to do. Maybe they refuse to focus on the present?

Overall, good job.