Comments : Today I am tomorrow I won't

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Wow, I love this. I like how in most of the brackets it's a contrasting phrase to what came before it. I also liked how you managed to make it rhyme, despite it's complexity.

    Really good.

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I loved this, absolutely loved it. I also really liked the brackets, it really added to the effect of the poem.

    "Words are easy, to speak (so much harder to mean)"
    ^^ I think it would sound better without the comma. Maybe just me though.

    "Hoping to leave (guessing I don't)
    Standing in crowds (but still so alone)
    Letting you go (because you're what I need most)
    Today I quite like you (tomorrow I won't) "

    ^^ I fricken adored those lines, they really stuck out to me. Great job.

    5.5
    :]
    <3