Aweee.
The other one is better, but I really like it.
It said a lot of truth, and the rhyming/flow was pretty good.

Bravo. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Nicley written

Good job it was good ~melissaraye~

Really good.
It had a perfect rythmn & flow.
Great work. Keep it up.
5/5
Bekka.x

Excellent poem , and you did great, the flow was good and wording was great , good job, keep it up.
your friend Tracy dean 5/5

Heyaa
i liked this!
the only criticism i have is "satisfaction" didnt seem to fit into that line very well, you could try using a different word with less sylables? but i dont think its a huge problem because it makes the poem less structured which can be a really good thing =]
Loved it overall
Geo

I love it!I can relate to every single part of it.It flowed smoothly and is very readable.5/5

<3Amber

O wow..
very talented writting indeed :)
style is so good and i love the ending!!
very well done
<3 ang

Youre quite an amazing writer. your writing just flows beautifully. i enjoyed it very much.

You're awesome..
You are just so talented.
Well maybe if u have time you
can stop and look at mine?!
lots of luck
~katrinaMarie~