The begining drew me in, the second staza, lost flow for a brief mooment towrd the end of it, and the flow of the third staza appered to be the same way. The last line to me was perhaps the most powerful line of the entire poem, the wording was great, and the emtion was deep, although I have read a few of your
poems and i think that you are capable of doing better, this was good, honestly and truly A well written peice, the spelling was great, the grammer was perfect, and the punction was amazing. I can't complain there, again great job, 5/5 for you deserve it. I hope this show I really read the poem, but I am not expecting commets in return.
its awesome realy nicely done and was true love feelings you realy know what is love and ints meaning.. you have great talent. you can do very well in writing. so i m going to add you in my favourites. takecare 5/5
This was an absolute beautiful poem dear! I loved reading every single line, it was so sad and full of emotion. Not only were your words beautiful, but your poem is very organized.. the lines aren't all messed up and the reader doesn't have any problem reading it. Great job! =) Keep up the wonderful work 5/5 <3 <3
I agree with Vanessa ^------ up there at the top. you drew me in with the begining, because it was worded correctly, but i kinda lost touch with the second and third. but definatley made a come back with the forth. i'm not saying to remake ur poem to "make it sound better" bcus with me i hate to change a poem i think is so beautiful. but maybe next time, try to make a better flow