Eeek i LOVE acrostics.

This was really good.
The only not so great thing was how it the second last two lines the flow went away.
If you could hold the flow through out the entire poem it wouldve been great.
Still really good.
Well done :]

Very well done. she helped you wonderfully!

xo kisses xo

Wow.. i love this poem.. its so sweet and written with the perfect choice of words.. also its shows how much talent you have because it doesnt seem like an acrostic at all.. ususally some parts seemed forced because of the restricted choice of words you have to choose from for each line but this whole poem came together wonderfully... keep it up :D

Another sweet and great poem by my favorite writer.
keep it up

Aww very cute
i loved it
great use of words
wonderful job

Very nice poem. I loved the flow and the word choice and the image. I gave it 5/5.

Awww this was really sweet.. and usually with acrostics some rhymes seem forced but this was very nicely written and everything flowed very well.. excellent job. and thanks for the comment =]

Your beginning?
Wonderful, dear.
It's very... discriptive and very, very clear.
Also, I loved the flow of where you're going.

All is [[so]] serene there [[is]] no reason for alarms;
I don't like the word so.
I think it's childish.
Just what a regular teenager would say.
Also, your is is supposed to be "are"
Just verb conscion is all.

Your ending?
I love it.
It's.. musical almost.
Eck.
What am I saying.
Lol.
But still.
Your flow was wonderful.
Your grammar was a bit off at some points,
But it was okay.
All in all.
Wonderful write, dear.
5/5?

I love this.
Very beautiful and touching, and such beautiful imagery portrayed throughout.
Alot of the time acrostics come across as unfinished because people can't find the right words, but this was definietly worth the read...beautiful work with this.