Awesome poem ilike it alot

ashleigh

Great poem

Nice.. powerful for such a short poem

"Apocalypse was my only desire,"

I like that line. Which do you exactly mean, by the way--a total destruction and revelation of the whole world or a total destruction and revelation of oneself? In either cases, I think it's quite interesting, I dare say.

"The darkness guides me,
Heaven abandoned me."

Since you used the voice of a past tense for the most part, you *could change "guides" to "guided". Further, in order to augment its grammar and structure, add "as" after the comma in the first line as an enjambment.

"The darkness guided me, as
Heaven abandoned me."

^ It sounds and reads better now, does it not?

On the whole, it's a nicely written Acrostic poem... Nice shot once again!

-Debbie Cakes

Ive noticed alot of ur poetry is dark, why is that? i still think its very good, and it deserves a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!