The feeling were powerful and the wording choice made it better
But there is some bugs here

Change things that I�ve done
Realizing now
That they don�t lead to fun.

If you correct those..It would be great
Keep it up,
Laura

That's really sad! But beautifully written, keep it up, and thanks for your comment on my poem, and by the way, I love your hair, it's so cool!
Helen