Comments : Ordinary Day

  • 16 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Huhm, well. I couldn't really stick to reading this one.. but maybe you can tell me the actual meaning? -shrugs-..

    And.. I don't like writing poems.. so you'll often see me degrading them. Cheers.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Pretty nifty. =]

    it was a little confusing, but overall not bad at all. =]

    i think it could be longer(dont get me wrong many of mine are this length) but i think adding more would help it be more understandable. i donno.. anyways,. good job. =]

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. fantastic poem.. the flow was perfect and the word choice was excellent.. this poem really comes to life.. the way you described everything was so wonderful and created a very enjoyable read..

  • 16 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Haha. I love reading comments.. you know why? Because half the people who comment on poems don't even know how to begin to interpret what is written.

    Sometimes theres the poem thats easy as hell to read, other times there's this sense of difficulty. So, let me ask you, do you really think the two people that commented your poem fully understood what they were reading? .. Or was it just a "simple comment" to get you to read their work (maybe even pay you back for reading one of theirs, mind you).

    ANYWAY, after your explanation I know can -truthfully- say I like this poem and the meaning it conveys. Good work. 4.5/5

    Oh by the way, sorry for the double comment.

  • 16 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    This poem was so sad.
    it brought tears to my eyes.

    Passed a time I was losing
    Meager joy surrounding a hapless scenery
    Tinted with dulled glee amid an ordinary life
    No opportunity to breathe life to freedom

    Discard the shatter memories
    Deal with the scars of today
    Embrace the journey of nothingness
    To escape the coming and going of pain

    greatly written stanza.
    keep up the good work
    take care
    emmeline