Comments : Lemon Tree [[not done]]

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A great work as always.
    you are truly very talented dear.
    keep it up and keep in touch.

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I admire you for doing something that isn't done alot, i really like the struture, and the flow, and the word chice and emtion was excellent. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Excellent job!..different not like all the usual poems anyways...n the flow was good....n the word choice was perfect!
    Good poem=)
    5/5
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    It's not horrible.
    But it's not all that great either.
    There's still hope for it, though.
    I won't vote because I'm probably going to downvote.
    Lol.
    Unless you want me to, of course.

    Underneath the lemon tree,
    You used to sit and talk to me,
    We talked about nothing,
    And we talked about everything.

    You used talked a lot.
    Maybe you could change that.

    "You" is not really the best for a beginning.
    I don't know.
    I guess it's just me.

    Plus, it's not done.
    I'll finish commenting when you are, dear :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Krzysztof J

    I like it so far :)) it made me think of the project i had invisioned for our back yard :) a pool, a lemon tree and concreat as far as the eye could see, dad said no :( but this poem made me smile 5/5